Tablature Critiquing Thread

[AugmentedFourth]

C minor and E flat triangle? Sorry, I'm not great with theory... :S But yeah it is a little more commercial sounding than what i usually write, I mean you gotta have some songs for the crowd in your set sometimes .

As for your tab... I.. don't really know what to say. It's not really the sort of music I would usually listen to so I'm not sure how to take it, it's interesting, that's for sure.

Sorry I couldn't be more helpful.

Sorry about that. the delta sign (triangle) just means major, and it implies a major 7 (as opposed to leaving it ambiguous as to whether it really is dominant or a maj7)

Hah, yeah Magnesium is a little whack esp. at the beginning, but I like it as one of my own compositions because I was able to make a nice harmony and lead part in that solo section using only the diminished (half-whole) scale, a la Blotted Science (not that I would ever liken myself to a Ron Jarzombek )

 

[JEngelking]

To this thread up, I've got this little thing I've been trying to work on. Noooo idea what should come next though. I have an idea for another part that will come later in the song, but not immediately after where it currently ends. Maybe a melody/lead part next?

Slip n Slide.gp5

 

[kylendm]

Not really sure either but that was really cool. It was really melodic and I like how you went out of key. Very BOO or Periphery like in that sense.

 

[kylendm]

Trying to make the heaviest song I can for my band. It's going pretty well so far.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/3602793/4.gp5

 

[JEngelking]

Not really sure either but that was really cool. It was really melodic and I like how you went out of key. Very BOO or Periphery like in that sense.

Trying to make the heaviest song I can for my band. It's going pretty well so far.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/3602793/4.gp5

Thanks man!
As for yours, SO MANY HEAVIES. What you've got going sounds pretty cool.

 

[Sebski]

Trying to make the heaviest song I can for my band. It's going pretty well so far.

https://dl.dropbox.com/u/3602793/4.gp5

That sounds sick so far man. I'm kinda imagining it going into a double bass verse riff kinda thing, if you ask me. But either way I'd like to see where you're going with that.

I'm looking for some feedback on a kinda proggy metal epic thing please if you don't mind. I've recorded it but with shitty mixing so once I get the time to figure out how to mix it better I will do. But as for now, some people have said the ending isn't epic enough basically, so I'd just like to get some more people's views. It's attached in the first post of this thread.

UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com - Proggy Metal Epic (BTBAM/HAARP Machine-ish) (c4c)

Cheers

 

[SquirtleSquad]

...
I'll go first, this is a song i have almost done recorded and it's in the recording sub forum but I added a bit more too it. Any thoughts would be appreciated!

This song ruuuules. I'd love to write with you at some point.

Here's a tab I'm working on for an LP of mine.
Icosian - Demo1

 

[JEngelking]

This song ruuuules. I'd love to write with you at some point.

Here's a tab I'm working on for an LP of mine.
Icosian - Demo1

That was really cool man! I felt like the song flowed together nicely for the most part. I think it'd be cool to hear the circus bridge expanded more, I enjoyed that part a lot. After that, some part of me wishes there was some sort of transition between the bridge and the "cum in my pants" part lol. Other than that though, I really liked the melodicness that that song had, very nice.

 

[Fat-Elf]

This song ruuuules. I'd love to write with you at some point.

Here's a tab I'm working on for an LP of mine.
Icosian - Demo1

Love this one, very melodic and interesting rhythms.

UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com - Proggy Metal Epic (BTBAM/HAARP Machine-ish) (c4c)

Riff-wise, not really my cup of tea but you can program some mean drums. Love those fills.



And for some reason I can't open kylendm's file.

 

[Sebski]

Fair enough, glad you liked the drumming though!

How about this though?
UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com - Proggy Metalcore-ish, dunno, WIP (c4c)

I think the whole D section is pretty weak, so I'm gonna work on changing that. But otherwise...?

 

[JEngelking]

Fair enough, glad you liked the drumming though!

How about this though?
UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com - Proggy Metalcore-ish, dunno, WIP (c4c)

I think the whole D section is pretty weak, so I'm gonna work on changing that. But otherwise...?

I enjoyed that a lot! I liked how you managed to integrate odd time signatures while still maintaining a natural feel throughout. Like you said, the 7/4 section wasn't as strong as the others, but I think with a little work it could be up to par with the rest of the song. I also liked the progressive edge while still maintaining a metal(core) vibe to it. It was cool how the whole song really built up to that ending solo, really ends the song on a high note.

Not too many other comments other than that. Nice work!

 

[straightshreddd]

Nice, dudes. Everyone's got some really cool stuff.

I'm currently hashing out harmonies and drum parts, then I'll be able to contribute. I'm really stoked and confident in the piece I'm working on. Hopefully, ya'll n*ggas will dig it, too! haha It's more deathcore influenced with blasts and 5/4 time sigs and a bunch of harmonic minor work with some augmented and occasional diminished. I'm liking it a lot; can't wait to show you dudes.

 

[JEngelking]

Nice, dudes. Everyone's got some really cool stuff.

I'm currently hashing out harmonies and drum parts, then I'll be able to contribute. I'm really stoked and confident in the piece I'm working on. Hopefully, ya'll n*ggas will dig it, too! haha It's more deathcore influenced with blasts and 5/4 time sigs and a bunch of harmonic minor work with some augmented and occasional diminished. I'm liking it a lot; can't wait to show you dudes.

 

[SquirtleSquad]

Thank you so much!

 

[Fat-Elf]

Here is one of my metalcore songs. The intro and verse riffs are kinda weak but I personally like the chorus and C-part really much. What do you think?

Z85.rar

 

[JEngelking]

Here is one of my metalcore songs. The intro and verse riffs are kinda weak but I personally like the chorus and C-part really much. What do you think?

Z85.rar

I like those sections a lot, too. Like you said, some more variations in the verse riffs would be good. I think some sort of transition before the last chorus might be of benefit too.

I really enjoyed all the melody and energy in that song though!

 

[Fat-Elf]

I like those sections a lot, too. Like you said, some more variations in the verse riffs would be good. I think some sort of transition before the last chorus might be of benefit too.

I really enjoyed all the melody and energy in that song though!

Someone actually took time to listen my song? The verse is very repetitive but I find it really difficult to change riffs in a complete song. The last chorus could have some transition but on the other hand I think the one bar it has actually fits really well.

 

[JEngelking]

Someone actually took time to listen my song? The verse is very repetitive but I find it really difficult to change riffs in a complete song. The last chorus could have some transition but on the other hand I think the one bar it has actually fits really well.

Yeah, upon second listen I think that one bar transition is pretty fitting. As for the verses, sometimes differentiation can come down to just layering on more complimentary ideas. Not a deal breaker by any means though.

 

[Fat-Elf]

Might as well throw this in here. I wrote that first song when I was in 10th grade and all over metalcore so this one is a little more fresh and technical. Tempo and key changes ftw!

song5.rar

Oh, and it's only about 80% finished so don't mind the ending.

 

[JEngelking]

I really like your melodic ideas! I definitely hear the progression from that first song. That tempo change transition to the groove at 41 cool as hell. I also enjoyed the addition of the overlapping synths around measure 70 too.

Would be awesome to hear that recorded.