New song idea...

[Cyanide Assassin]

ok so i just have like 2 or 3 ideas that are inda short in the thing. one without vocals and one with vocals. i know i need to mix it better turn up the drums and the bass drum does get buried by the guitars. also the snare is mediocre and loud and the vocals are sitting on top of the mix i need to figure out how to get them into it rather just on top of it. wrote the riffs about 20 minutes ago. played and recorded them today same with the drums. tell me what you think. thanks guys.

without vocals

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with vocals

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